Mrs Elizabeth Darcy

This is really cute...I love how you translated it into a toy story. In some places, though, your rhythm was a little off. You might want to add a few ...

Why am I not better than every one else? Why am I so average? I am no prettier, No stronger, No smarter, No anything more than my comrades. I am ...

Entity He grabbed her hand and began to get away again, fast, only this time looking where he was going. Safely away, he relaxed and grinned at her. "Sorry," he ...

Entity The air smelled burned. That was the first thing that flashed through Entity's mind as he opened his eyes. He looked around, rubbing the sleep from his eyes. Suddenly ...

Name: Entity; when human Devon Age: 17 Gender: Male Race: Faerie Guardian or Friend: Guardian named Destiny Appearance: Faerie: Brown skin, untidy blue hair, plastic-blue eyes and green wings, always ...

Wow. Wow. Wow!! I don't know what happened...but wow. I was really surprised. I didn't expect it to be so good. It's like... wow. I am going to make sure ...

As always your spelling and punctuation were a little off, but the idea and story is beautiful. I didn't scrutinize it, but I love how you said some one was ...

Oooooh, creeeeepy :) I think what you need to do is quit capitalizing after a quotation, and when you describe how some one said something, put a comma. Example: “Hannah, ...

She flew to her feet and whirled around. There he stood, shoulders slightly stooped, brown curls disheveled, as though he had been running. They stared at each other a moment, ...

The play was as good as the plays at the theatre usually were. Harmony enjoyed it immensely, and Melody would have, if she had not been feeling such fury and ...

"Discomfort" instead of "miss comfort", but otherwise great!! :D Jessy and Chase are frighteningly freakish!!

Try "skinnier" rather than "more skinny" and work on your general punctuation and spelling as suggested. Otherwise, good!! You are descriptive, but not TOO descriptive, and you create a very ...

This story made me cry...I confess I only read it because I saw a trailor for the movie and thought it looked interesting, so I wanted to read the book ...

I rented Northanger Abbey from the library, and at first I thought Mr. Tilney was going to be like Willoughby or Wickham, because he was so pleasant. So I was ...

"Melody, do come! We're already late!" "Wait a moment." Harmony sighed and flopped on the stoop. Knowing Melody, a moment meant eternity. Harmony's real name was Marguerite, but everybody called ...